Bobby prepared numerous revisions to his essay discussing the novel ,"Catcher in the Rye". We first looked at sentences that included superfluous words and discussed ways to eliminate them. Bobby did very well in recognizing and correcting this issue. We then focused on removing the awkward "is when" construction from the essay followed by adding nouns to clarify floating pronouns. After I pointed out ideas, words, or phrases that could be stated more precisely, Bobby was quick to offer alternatives which we discussed and then incorporated into the essay.We will complete this exercise tomorrow,