Yanuell completed his rough draft of an essay comparing and contrasting the main characters in the novel,"Crash". He continues to show good initiative in combing the text to locate good examples supporting his topic sentence. After discussing the various options for textual support , Yanuell incorporated these examples into his rough draft and composed a conclusion. We then began revisions and rewriting . I continued to emphasize that the art of writing is actually in the rewriting . We broke some long sentences into separate sentences for clarity and eliminated duplicative phrases. Yanuell has often proven to be a good editor of his own work which is a very positive development.