We are concentrating on Bobby becoming a conscientious editor of his own writing. Toward that end, we continued revising Bobby's essay on "Catcher in the Rye". Today, we noted a number of repetitive ideas in sentences and eliminated those sentences as well as sentences that did not contribute to the essay. Further, I again provided instruction on avoiding the awkward"is when" construction .Bobby worked out a number of good alternatives to this construction which we incorporated in the essay. Last, we analyzed where connectors such as "However, But, Although, and Therefore " would enhance the flow of the essay. We discussed when these words are appropriate and their different meaning and function. After some practice, Bobby was able to place a number of these "connectors" in strategic points . After we completed the essay , Bobby read the final version aloud so that he could hear and feel the improved word usage and language flow . For homework, I assigned continuing on the Shakespeare composition so that we could review and revise as necessary on Wednesday.