Lilly requested assistance with a long paper she is preparing for her IB program. After discussing the nature of the assignment I addressed the literary definitions of tragedy and romanticism . Looking at her draft, we focused on clarifying the type of tragedy she is addressing- a tragedy of destiny and fate-and how to emphasize her thesis or claim in the opening paragraphs. We further addressed removing superfluous words ,phrases and ideas that interrupted the logic of the argument as well as adding descriptive words that added details to her written presentation.