We continue to work on Joshua's essay writing skills. After I provided my comments on his most recent essay on "Billy Budd" , we began working on revisions to improve organization and clarity. I specifically directed his attention to sentences that could be better placed in the introduction and we discussed my deletions where words were superfluous. I next focused on the need to incorporate quotes or better textual support and provided passages that could be incorporated into the body of the essay. During the session, Joshua was able to complete a thought provoking thesis in the introduction and to revise the second paragraph of his essay. He will complete the revision for homework based on class discussion and my comments on the draft.