We reviewed JP's "commentary" essay and his synthesis essay exercise. Regarding the commentary essay, I noted his strong thesis and relevant commentary but focused on my written comments suggesting the need to improve sentence structure and diction. We further reviewed how to correct run-on sentences as well as subject-pronoun agreement. As JP encountered difficulty with the synthesis exercise, I further provided additional instruction on citing and incorporating the evidence from the provided sources and drafting commentary explaining the relevance of the source or commenting on the source's credibility.