We continued instruction and editing of JP's argumentative essay on self-determination. I first provided a review and instruction on elements to incorporate into a conclusion which for JP's essay included a statement as to why his thesis is important . We then focused on how to use and argue historical evidence. As JP had difficulty articulating his ideas, I provided a number of model sentences and transitions followed by commentary explaining how the evidence proved the thesis. We spent additional time discussing how to write and to organize commentary that ties back to the writer's main claim. Based on class instruction, JP worked on completing his essay in class .