I assisted JP in drafting a revision of his rhetorical analysis essay . We first discussed the distinction between line of reasoning and parallel structure as an element of syntax in order to clarify the point of his second paragraph that seemed to incorporate both concepts. After I provided JP textual examples illustrating the speaker's line of reasoning , JP worked on incorporating specific quotes into his draft and then explaining how the line reasoning demonstrates the speaker's awareness of her audience's values, and biases. Next, I distributed. student essays from the College Board site that analyzed this same passage as it appeared in the 2017 exam. We studied the essay that earned the highest score and discussed the essay's strong points noting how the student continually explains how her quotes demonstrate the speaker's awareness of her audience. We also discussed how the AP exam only provides 40 minutes per essay . Thus, perfection is not required. We noted a number of misspellings and irrelevancies that did not impact the student's score.