We studied ,revised, and edited JP's rhetorical analysis essay . We noted a strong introduction and a thesis that outlined that the essay would address diction and pathos. I assisted JP in recognizing that his examples-rhetorical questions- did not clearly evidence either pathos or ethos. As such, we rewrote the paragraph to explain how each rhetorical question employed "we" as a means of demonstrating a shared value or experience with the intended audience-ethos. I then directed JP to a portion of the speech that evoked emotion or pathos and we discussed how to incorporate that example into the next paragraph. As JP had questions on how to draft a conclusion to this type of essay, we reviewed various options and approaches. JP will conclude his rewrite this evening.