We reviewed and edited Matthew's rhetorical analysis essay. Matthew's tone, syntax , and diction remains impressive. However, we continue to develop thesis support. As the essay's thesis indicated a focus on pathos and ethos, I first directed Matthew's attention to an anecdote related by the speaker. Matthew quickly recognized this anecdote as a strong example of pathos and incorporated strong quotes from the speech into his essay. Likewise, we discussed the need to find support for the proposition that the speaker offers a global solution to the issue of terrorism. Matthew again did very well in locating a strong example to incorporate into the essay. I explained that this section of the speech also illustrated the speaker's organization or line of development, which is also a rhetorical device. We discussed how an essay that recognizes how devices overlap offers sophistication. By the end of our editing session, Matthew had composed a very strong rhetorical analysis essay.