As Joshua encountered difficulty with the second essay question on the "Daisy Miller" test, today we worked on essay organization, and analysis. After I distributed my comments , we examined Joshua' s work ,sentence by sentence. I first explained that the essay sought an analysis of the novel's conflict, Man v Society ,and noted the lack of a topic sentence and lack of a conclusion paragraph. I provided a model topic sentence to begin the essay and explained the need to postpone particulars until the body of the paragraph. I further reviewed the prompt to explain how the prompt focuses on the Man v Society theme and the essay therefore should provide examples. We then rewrote the second paragraph per my comments which essentially reordered all of the sentences to create a coherent discussion about Daisy Miller's perhaps disingenuous rejection of societal norms that apply to women (only). I further provided instruction on forming a new paragraph to address conflict resolution as well as a final paragraph that offers some comment on how society treats the non-conformist, especially if she is a woman. Joshua will rewrite the essay -due Tuesday.