Bobby's essay for his "Of Mice and Men" test demonstrated significant improvement which we built on today. I first addressed simple grammatical issues such as commas, and capitalization followed by correcting one sentence fragment. We then turned our attention to writing in a consistent tense. We reviewed and conjugated the present tense and the past tense of the verb"to be" and then noted where the second paragraph shifted tense from the present to the past tense. I provided instruction on how to address the tense change including the option of using the present participle to retain tense consistency. We then discussed substance including elaborating on ideas in the essay by incorporating more specific examples and quotes and clarifying misstatements. We discussed how to add Steinbeck's use of Edenic imagery to the essay . Last, we addressed any superfluous words and tense changes in the conclusion. At the end of session, Bobby read aloud his essay revisions which produced a coherent well written essay response. For homework due Monday, read ch 2 and complete study guide questions-Call of the Wild.