Jayne writes beautifully. I made a hard copy of her story to check her usage of the Standard conventions of English and made few edits. Content was untouched, but there were some minor revisions regarding commas and omitted periods, capitalization of the next letter as a result, end quotation marks, and apostrophes using the possessive forms of words like common and proper nouns. Jayne used exceptional analogies and word choices to capture and emphasize meaning. Jayne reviewed my edits and made the appropriate changes. She understood them and did not require any clarification, although it was offered, should she need it. I commended Jayne for the originality of her work and her use of analogies, metaphors, and overall creativity, hooking the reader.