We addressed my comments and suggestions directed to the first paragraphs of the explanatory essay. Carson first corrected run-on sentences , and we then discussed how to reorganize the sentence order of the second paragraph so as not to disrupt the explanation . Next ,given the purpose of the essay, to inform, we addressed editing sentence structure and word choice by using the command or imperative voice to eliminate the "you" sentence structure.Last, I provided guidance on drafting a conclusion that explained the importance of the essay's thesis to its audience. Carson started on his final paragraph that he will complete before Monday's class.