For our first session, we first discussed novels and books Grace has studied this year. We then turned our attention to Grace's fiction writing sample, a portion of a short story. I noted her impressive use of strong verbs and used her work to discuss the use of metaphor and personification ,two terms she had not yet encountered. Next, I provided punctuation instruction when using quotes, as well as run-on/fragment instruction. Grace edited her work to remove the run-ons Last, I discussed paragraph cohesion in a descriptive paragraph. After I provided a list of cohesion phrases /words , Grace revised a descriptive paragraph in her story using the organizational techniques and phrases studied.