edit 5 paragraph essay

Clay had his essay completed today, and while it wasn't bad, there were some glaring problems. The most concerning was his introductory paragraph, which was one big run-on sentence, didn't have a topic sentence, and didn't have a thesis statement. We have gone over introductions multiple times and Clay is more than capable of doing a better job. Similarly, he failed to have a topic sentence for each of his body paragraphs as well. He did a good job of including examples to illustrate his point, but has to focus on the required elements more carefully. We talked about taking his time and focusing while writing, and not writing just to get to the end.