5 paragraph essay

After reading Clay's paragraphs for today, I decided to focus on editing and rewriting. His ideas were jumbled, he didn't have clear topic sentences, and his third paragraph was all over the place without any one specific topic. Even more disconcerting was the appearance of "like" in his writing, which is very new, and repeated run-on sentences. It appears, that as Clay gets more comfortable with writing, he's starting to put less effort into it. We went over two of the paragraphs, and I assigned the introduction and conclusion for Friday.