We continued reviewing Drew's essay on a "special place', for him the Smokey Mountains . I provided instruction on maintaining a single subject in each paragraph by discussing where and how to transpose sentences to maintain this consistency. We then worked on drafting a conclusion that does more than reiterate the first paragraph or the prior points. Next, we moved on to Drew's literary essay. I addressed the standard elements of a first paragraph ,including introducing the characters and the setting. Drew's essay did a good job with character introductions but lacked setting context that would be relevant to the topic of bravery. We worked on adding an historical setting context to the first paragraph which we completed.

For our initial session, I first introduced the difference between conversational English and formal academic English. We then began reviewing Drew's essay on Nature. I provided guidance on eliminating the "you" construction in formal writing and demonstrated how to revise this construction. Drew then did very well in revising sentences to remove this construction. We then addressed dangling modifiers, combining sentences, and run -on sentences. Again,Drew adroitly was able to recognize the issue and revise accordingly. Last, we began a discussion of forming a thesis statement in the opening paragraph.