For our initial session, I first introduced the difference between conversational English and formal academic English. We then began reviewing Drew's essay on Nature. I provided guidance on eliminating the "you" construction in formal writing and demonstrated how to revise this construction. Drew then did very well in revising sentences to remove this construction. We then addressed dangling modifiers, combining sentences, and run -on sentences. Again,Drew adroitly was able to recognize the issue and revise accordingly. Last, we began a discussion of forming a thesis statement in the opening paragraph.