Al came in with the new document, which we went over. I've noticed much fewer mistakes with tense and sentence structure, but his new tendency is to put too many commas into the text. We went through the major rules he needs to worry about and he seemed to pick it with little problem.

Al's writing has improved a great deal, and our proofreading sessions are growing more minimal. He still needs to work on some sentence structure issues and start using articles, but the progress is apparent.

Al seemed very stressed out today, but his writing has definitely improved. He's gotten much more direct and concise, and is making far fewer mistakes with tense. His new thing is dropping his articles. I stressed that was not the way to be more concise. "A" and "the" are two pretty important words.

Al has made a lot of progress, but is now confronted with a different type of writing. I'm confident he's in good shape to write facts of the case, but in this instance, he was asked to right a summary of multiple articles. The material was very dense and difficult, and it's logical that he would have trouble with it. We went through it step by step and I showed him how to simplify the process.

Al really has come a long way in a very short time. I think the last major component he needed was learning to truly focus when proofreading. Apparently his supervisor has already told him he's made great improvement. Today we focused on proofreading again. His recognition of grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing has gotten much better.

Al is really starting to get the hang of the more direct and concise style of writing. He understands the basic rules of grammar we've covered, the trick now is getting him to recognize his mistakes. I realized there might be a breakdown in his proofreading, so today we focused on the that. It turns out that he does have an issue. He's so focused on the "facts" of what he's writing, that he passes over the minutia. He actually read multiple grammatically incorrect sentences as correct. This is really a matter of practice and focusing on the details.

Al has a done a good job of absorbing everything we've discussed, but needs to continue to work on applying it to his writing. He's gotten more concise, but is still having problems with sentence structure and verb tense.

Al brought in a new sample and his sentence structure has improved. We worked on focusing on one topic per paragraph and keeping his sentences as simple and direct as possible. He has a lot of trouble seeing mistakes in his writing.

It was a very productive first meeting with Al. He has definite issues with sentence structure, verb tense, and proofreading. We went through a writing sample he brought, and identified multiple areas to work on. Most importantly though is teaching him to write in a concise manner and maintain consistency throughout.