Ramesses sent me his college essay Draft 1 and I read, analyzed and made notes and suggestions on it. We sat and reviewed it together and walked through tips for Draft 2. We are going to work on (1) wordiness and repetition of words, phrases and ideas and (2) Ramesses is going to add more specific details, show don't tell, and characterization of him. I threw much information at him, but I believe he feels confident for his next draft. We will meet tomorrow at 2:30