Ramesses sent me Draft 2 of his essay. He applied much of what we discussed yesterday and it was a huge improvement. I went through it and made more suggestions to work on more wordiness and adding some more characterization. Then we conferenced and went through it together. Today, I had Ramesses use my computer and we made revisions in real time. Ramesses is very bright and we are on the same page. He applied everything we discussed and I believe he learned some valuable writing tips that he can apply to his writing in life. We cut his essay down from 800 (and something) words to 647 words. His essay is sounding amazing! Good session!